
It's late on a Tuesday afternoon, I'm stepping up to a thin white line spray painted into the grass. For the past two weeks I've been running more than I ever have in my entire life. I've quickly been forced into the closest thing I could call "in shape" that I've ever been in. My nine teammates surround me giving me tips about what to do when the gun goes off. Being the only freshman, I'm the only one who is finding everything around me new.
When I came into the first day of practice, I didn't know what I was getting into. As a middle school football player and unmotivated recreational runner, I had never run more than five miles, slowly. I first met a sophomore named Bo Waggoner, who would go to state the next 3 years and become the top runner at Duke University. He was a very down to earth guy and seemed happy to know that at least there would be one new person on the team this year. Eventually the rest of the team showed up; Five seniors, a junior, and three sophomores. Coach Dugai finally arrived and talked for a short time about the season ahead. Afterwards, we did a short jog to the track and warmed up.
Our first run would be four and a half miles. The first day loop was what it was called, due to the fact that it had almost always been Dugai's first workout for his team. We started right outside the football stadium and started at what would eventually become an easy pace for the run. For my first year, though, I was always running at almost my fastest pace, which was still pretty slow in comparison to the rest of the team.
The first day loop is basically a square, it starts off going to a main street and turns left at every main street until your back where you started. When I started off this run, the route had been explained to me but I still wasn't overly sure what it was. The team pulled very far ahead of me by the time I had gotten down the first street. By the time I got to the third street, I was very tired and couldn't quite remember what the route was. I ended up turning into the Toledo recreation center, which I knew as the route for the Maumee 5K and tried to figure out if the team had gone this way.
After somewhat wandering around I decided just to go back to the high school through the 5K route. As I came down the last street, the team had been there for a good ten minutes waiting for me to come in. Feeling very disappointed with how bad of shape I was in I was already contemplating quitting the team and coming back next year. As I ran towards the end of the loop the team was lined up next to the end and started clapping me in. It made me feel accepted by a team for the first time and I quickly changed my mind about quitting and finished the run.
For the next two weeks we practiced hard and the team was always helping me along the way. When I played football in middle school, I was horrible and most of the team let me know on a daily basis. When I started cross country though, the team knew I wasn't fast, but they were always trying to help me and encouraging me along the way.
On the second Thursday of practice, we ran a workout known as 800s. They are basically a speed workout made to make you faster but not without a good amount of pain first. The idea is to run at race pace around the track for two laps. Then, after a couple minutes of a break you do it again and try to match that time. It's not so much about having the fastest time on one of your 800s, but about keeping a consistent time.
Realizing how hard every other workout hard been so far, and how much the team had warned me about them, I knew this was going to be a very difficult run. We all lined up on the track, we were going to do four today, we were told. Coach Dugai gets us set and says go as he starts his watch. I raced around the track twice coming in at a time of around 4:30. After getting a drink we did another, followed by another. The next two I came in around the 4:40s. When the last one came up I prepared to give it one last go. After I came around the first time two of the runners were already done and one of them, Alex Washburn, joined me and started pushing my pace. He ran slightly in front of me constantly pushing and saying things like " Come on Phil," or "Push it, just stay ahead of me." I started running with everything I had to stay in front of him and with the rest of the team cheering me on I finished the two laps in a time of 4:16.
During every long, slow run, the team would run at my pace and help me get better by giving me advice. Finally the day of the first race came.
Our home course was an old fort from the war of 1812 named Fort Meigs. The course ran around the outside of the fort so there were a number of hills making the course very difficult. As we stood at the line waiting for the gun to go off, I was filled with nerves. I had no idea how to strategize my race, what the course was like, or how I was going to do.
This race was always the first of the year and is known as the Maumee Lid Lifter. Our team would invite three or four schools to run but only two would normally show up since they were small schools.
Being a home race, Coach Dugai was the starter. He gave the simple rules that I would hear dozens of times over the next four years. The white lines mark the course, 2 laps around the course and finish by the picnic tables. Then, "I'm going to put the gun and my other hand up, I'll say runners set. You step to the line. Then when everyone is still, I'll fire the starting gun and drop both arms. Good luck."
When he finishes his speech, we are all quiet waiting for the first instructions. "Runners set!" We step to the line. BANG! The gun fires and twenty-some high school runners are sprinting to the first turn. I quickly fall into the back of the pack and let the flow of adrenaline carry me through the first half a mile. As I come around to the end of the first lap, I get ready to go up the biggest hill on the course, Agony hill. Named mainly for how long and steep it is, making it sheer agony for most runners who have to climb it during the race.
As I make my way to the top of the hill, most of the people watching the race are at that spot to cheer us all on. The cheering gives me all the motivation I need to get to the top and I cruise through the last part of the hill. The rest of the race flies by as I battle with another team's last runner. As we scale agony hill for the last time we are neck and neck. We come into the last turn where I learn that, while I had been giving all my energy over the entire race, the other runner had not and he quickly sprinted away from me to the finish line. I ended up coming in last place with a time of 29:47. To cross country standards, that's a very slow time. But to my own standards, that was the fastest I'd ever run. The team congratulated me on my first race and we gathered together to talk to the coach about the race.
He congratulated us or winning the meet and told us to get ready for the warm down. At our home races this meant a three mile run home.
We got home and the next day began preparing for our race on Saturday. Now that the season started and we were kind of in the full swing of things, training was a lot easier. Instead of doing difficult runs almost daily, we changed to having a long run on Wednesday, 800s on Thursday, and a short easy run on Friday to prepare us for our Saturday Invitationals. When Saturday finally arrived, we left the high school at around 8 A.M. to ride the bus an hour away to the Fremont Ross Invitational. An Invitational is very different from a dual/tri-meet in that instead of two or three teams, there are around twenty and the races are all broken up. There are two divisions and varsity is separated from junior varsity.
I'm going to attempt to explain the semi-complicated method of scoring for cross country, so if it's hard to understand, you're not alone. On any team the top 7 runners make up the varsity squad. Five of them score points and the last two try to beat the other teams' top 5 to displace their score. The lowest overall score is the winning team. If your finding it hard to understand, don't worry it took me about half of my freshman year to fully comprehend it as well.

This is an essay about cross country, but on the inside it is more about acceptance, challenging yourself, and doing your best. The most compelling thing to me was that it was sports related, this made it more interesting for me to read. Obviously like you said that last paragraph was a little confusing, but that was to be expected. Overall it was pretty clear and easy to understand. There is a writer persona that started to shine through in the writing. There were some cases of self deprecation. You seemed to rip on yourself a lot about your football skills and for running a slower time. I would extended it with more details about the races. Maybe go into great detail about the kids around you and about the environment surrounding you.I don't think you asked yourself any questions, but you probably could if you wanted to add that effect somewhere. There is some assuming that is taking place. I would have liked to know how long a cross country race is early on. Even add in the fact that you are talking about cross country early on. I thought that's what you were talking about, but I wasn't sure. The one sentence about not knowing how good he was until you saw him run was confusing to me, maybe I'm just misreading it. I like the scene to commentary ration that you developed in here. You could probably show us how you feel a little bit more. Possibly paint a picture of incredible confusion whenever you get lost in the one scene. This makes me think about myself as a freshman in lacrosse trying to keep up with some of the older juniors and seniors.
ReplyDelete1. The essay is about some of your experience with cross country
ReplyDelete2. It is hard to judge right now, but I think it's actually cross country, which will be revealed as a passion of yours, and the well being and bond it gave you as a result of feeling apart of a team/family (in the sports sense)
3.What's most compelling to me is the insight I gained on the sport of cross country. I knew not one thing about it and it was nice to somewhat picture it and what it is like. It was also compelling because I could relate to being behind all the varsity goes because I was a sophomore running extra with the varsity football team stars one morning.
3b. Nothing is really confusing to me and I don't really need to hear more of anything to understand. Besides in the beginning about the first loop. Is the path you took the one the rest of the team actually took? Or did you end up taking a shortcut?
4. The writing persona is a hard question to answer, because everybody writes differently. If I had to answer this question I'd say yes though. You write in a simple, easy to understand form, which is nice. Kind of like Bret Lott.
5. If you had to extend it I would go into more details about certain aspects if possible. Like what kind of morning it was on your first meet. Did you smell the dew on the grass? etc.
6. You didn't really ask yourself any questions for us to ponder on. Not a problem though, just answering the questions on the teachers blog.
7. You assume we know what your talking about, which isn't a problem in my opinion, because it's not fairly hard to understand. Besides the scoring part. Then you assume we don't and try to explain it to us and even go to the extent to say if we don't understand we are not alone. This makes it easier to relate.
8. The scenes blend with the commentary the whole way through
9. You tell us how you feel.
10. What I think when I read your essay is about my own experience with sports in high school. I also thought about how it isn't about winning, well shouldn't be, and how sports should be more about the bond and acceptance you build with your teammates. If I had to write an essay based on the topics introduced here it would be about high school football and the craziness and sense of family that is wrapped up in the overall love of the game.
There are a couple of grammatical errors, but they are really small. I was just trying to skim the whole thing again and couldn't even find them.
"My nine teammates surround me giving me tips about what to do when the gun goes off. Out of the ten runners, I'm the only freshman, which means that I'm the only one who has found everything going on the past two weeks new"
ReplyDeleteThis sentence seems to be a run-on. The last part of the sentence also needs to be reworded.
"the route had ben explained to..."
the fourth paragraph you spelled been wrong.
This essay is about you and your first cross-country experience. I found a few errors that I listed at the top. Overall I didn't get lost through your piece, which means you stayed on topic. I think the most compelling piece is when you wanted to quit, but the cheer of your teammates drove you to do better.
I think a better way to end this piece is with a conclusion, not the explaining of cross-country rules.
To extend this more, I would talk more about the practice and training you had to go through to become a cross country runner. Also you could give more detail about your emotions the day of the big race.
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ReplyDeleteHey Phil! So far your essay is great. It is about cross country and your experiences belonging to a team and how that team can grow into a family. The most compelling part of this essay was the part when your team mates were cheering you on as you finished your first practice. I liked this because it shows the first link to your team mates becoming your family members and It motivated you to keep with the sport.
ReplyDeleteI was confused about the beginning with the details about your first practice and about the route you took when running. I am a little foggy on understanding those details just as Georden said. Everything else was very clear and ordered very well.
I notice your persona coming through and I think with the continuation of this essay you could really give the reader great incite to who you are. You tell us that you were not very confident in the beginning and how you struggled with that and how being part of a team helped you out.
I would like to hear more about your team mates becoming more like a family because after all, these are family memoirs. Give some details about your team mates and who they are and how everyone related to each other.
Your scenes go along with your commentary very well the whole way through. Keep it up in the longer essay.
I am very interested to know more. Were there conflicts between your team and rivals? Were there any big events or injuries? I am curious to read the longer essay and find out more information.