Throughout the book Fathers, Sons, and Brothers, Bret Lott introduces his childrens childhood alongside his own stories. He uses his experiences as a child to guide him through being a father to his own boys. This becomes evident even from the first chapter. While talking about the garage, Lott writes, “Brad, Tim, and I had no choice but to take turns running as fast as we could along the asphalt driveway , then jumping flat footed onto that cement, blasting from pure California Saturday morning sunlight into the black garage to slide barefooted as far as we could arms out like surfers’ for balance.” (p. 4) Then later in the chapter, “I can hose the place down and teach my boys the finer points of garage sliding.” (p. 10) Lott slips in the last sentence subtly to express how he hopes his sons will have the same sort of escape from the family to bond as brothers. He first explains how after losing the garage he lost touch with his brothers, then adds that sentence to show how he wants his sons to be different in that aspect.
Another example of Lott using his experiences to shape his fatherly role is presented a little bit later in the “Learning Sex” chapter. Lott’s experience learning sex was simple; he learned most of it from people in school and other public and not so accurate sources. By the time his father finally asked him what he wanted to know, Lott had this to say, “I already know.” Later on, Lott writes, “At least—and at best—both Zeb’s mom and dad have had a hand in how he came to find out.” This means that Lott again learned from his experiences as a child to become the father that he is now. This example is different, though, because he made sure to be the opposite of his father so that his kids will not have to go through believing all the random lies about sex.
This is only part of what I will later add on to for our 900 word blog later this week
I believe the thesis is that Brett Lott uses his experiences as a child to guide him through being a father to his own boys. This is definitely true, but I don't know if it is argumentative enough. If I had to guess I would say that most people are going to agree with you on your thesis. What I really like about the post was at the end where you compared your two examples and said that they were different. I like the the differences in which him and his dad go about raising their kids, and how Brett applies what he learned from his dad when teaching his own kids. Maybe you could build off of that, and somehow turn it into an argumentative thesis. There isn't a lot of summary in the first paragraph, more of presenting a fact and then analyzing it. The second paragraph starts with summary, but I think it may be essential to the analyzing the follows the quote. Overall the post is on track and grammar free (from what I can catch) thus far.
ReplyDelete1a. I believe this is the thesis- He uses his experiences as a child to guide him through being a father to his own boys.
ReplyDelete1b.yes, the title of the book and the author are clearly identified.
2.direct quotes from the text are offered as support for the thesis. The quotes are properly introduced and the quotes with in the first paragraph are excellent. I would work on the analysis and introduction to the quotes in the second paragraph. Also, there may be something valuable at the end of the chapter titled "Allegiance."
3.Not much of this is summary. I think its pretty good as far as background information goes.
4. Possible counter arguments have not been addressed however those arguments could be that Bret learned about being a father through experience as a father or from watching his own father instead of that he learned about being a father through his experiences as a child.
5.I have not noticed any mistakes in grammar other than you should put the page numbers after the quotes in the second paragraphs.
6.Yes, the writers opinions are used as proof. The first paragraph is excellent. The second paragraph needs a little work but its starting out to be great.
7.Your essay doesn't really get off track. Its pretty much stays focused.
You are off to an awesome start. Keep it going.
Lott shares stories about his 1) childhood and 2) the childhood of his children.
ReplyDeleteLott compares the two.
How? To what effect? What does he realize about them? How does he show that in the writing?
Phil. You can do this sh**.